Blog #2
Most Challenging Experience So Far at School
Danny Ziegelman
September 29, 2015
I found my family’s departure as the most challenging experience so far as a college student. My friends know me as a moma’s boy and my dad and I share a lot together. They have always supported my endeavors and care for me like no one else. Going to school scared me very much. Who will care for me when I can’t? I have to on my own. Watching my dad drive off in the rain hurt a lot. My tears could not be distinguished from the rain drops covering my body. Watching my mom walk out my dorm room door and head back to Chicago hurt a lot too. Luckily, I can rely on my best friend from home.
Using Hedging to draw a conclusion:
I feel an else sense of connection and loss when my family left. I tend to be scared when I feel vulnerable. I often overcome these obstacles, but the process seems impossible.
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ReplyDeleteDanny,
ReplyDeleteI love this writing because I can easily relate to this topic. I, too, struggled with departing from my family for the first time. I also enjoyed how you used ( :) ) hedging to draw conclusions because you were able to make a decision about your stance, while still strengthening what you were saying. By using hedging, you were also able to make what you were saying less concrete.
Good Work.
By using hedging, I felt as though your writing was easy to read and I connected easily to it. This is a situation I am confident that most freshmen experience, and the way you put it to life using words that did not have any conjugation of 'to be', really made the reading experience beautiful.
ReplyDeleteI found this blog post very relatable. It is strange to think we have already been at college for a month. I cannot believe it has been that long since I have seen my parents. It feels like yesterday, but at the same time it feels like much further than yesterday. Your imagery of not being able to decipher the tears from the rain is beautiful! I miss my parents as well, but luckily there are some breaks coming up where I get to see them. Also, the conclusion with the hedging worked very well. The bolded words really added to the power of the statements. Nice blog!
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